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Under the rain,
My fury and pain
Will vanish, evaporate, wash away.

Under the moist, misty air,
I have not one single care,
As I dance to a wordless tune.

My toes tip! tap! tatter!
To words that don't matter,
For I know this will all end soon.

But I need not worry,
For I'm not in a hurry
Let the raindrops carry me home.

For when the sky's tears subdue,
I will think of you,
And then not feel so alone <3
The poem I just wrote in my bedroom :) I love water, and love dancing in the rain. This is also a "theme" for an awesome poetry group called #The-Poetry-Cafe

Tell me what you think please. I love to get feedback, and I love hearing anything you have to say. It's you who influences me to be a better writer ;)
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DarkCloudAssasin Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
I love this poem :) it's something I can very much relate to because I too love the rain :heart:
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TaylorHotner101 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the kindness :) And for the fav! I very much appreciate it, and I'm glad you could relate
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LoreleiSiren Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing work I love it very much. This speaks so much and expresses so much. Rain is a beautiful thing to me, which is why I live in a very rainy state! Keep writing, I really want to hear more from you!
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TaylorHotner101 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :) And thank you for watching me, I hope you enjoy my further pieces to come(:
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LoreleiSiren Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Re welce and I am sure I will enjoy them
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Masanohashi Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
it's so great ^^ I love the whole conception and the way it's rhymin

totally great :)
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DuskxChan Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
This is great! It's rly fun and sweet. Very creative as well. Keep it up<3
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armymanski Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Great poem! I love this one and it is written in a way so different that what I would have ever done. You captured the beauty of rain quite well.

I love the line

"My toes tip! tap! tatter!
To words that don't matter,"

It gives the wonderful sound of rain.

By the way, thanks for promoting the group!:-)
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TaylorHotner101 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks <3 I'm glad to hear that!

yeah, I thought that line had some twinge of emotion from inside of me... lol

Oh, no problem ;)
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armymanski Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I look forward to seeing more like this:-)
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TaylorHotner101 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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mickeymousemic Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
This is amazing Mao!<3
You are amazing at poems, so creative, full of emotion! I love it! i especially love the last stanza (thats what it's called right? >>; )
Amazing job! :)
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TaylorHotner101 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:'D Thanks Micks! Ur comments always make me smile.

And yes, it's a stanza xD

Thanksies! I <3 ya! ^^'
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